Another revision



For this week, for the reading task, I had to go back and touch up some of the feedback that I’ve posted on the blogs of the people that I’ve had to review—making some improvements on them or what lessons that I can use on my following peer review. However, I’m going, be honest. I didn’t change much with my blog post, mainly because of the excellent feedback, and I thought it was good. I mean, probably there were a few things that needed to be tidied up a bit. Below are the changes that I’ve made: 

Change 1
For this, I had wanted to add more bullet points to my blog. When I first looked at the blog, I noticed that there were not many bullet points, just two bullet points which are okay. I needed to fix that and get more of my thoughts in the blog itself on the three videos that I reviewed. 

Change 2
For the second change, I wanted to focus on the layout itself. What I mean by that is to have the text justified to make it tidier, and it looks very well spaced out, which I will use for future essays. 

Change 3
Finally, for the third change, I decided to add bold text to my subheadings to stand and make it easier for readers to see what paragraph is what to read it more manageable. 

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